Hare and Tortoise - learning to craft a Narrative

At writing time the Year 4s have been writing a Narrative about Hare and Tortoise.
We are learning how to show the reader a story using:

1. Orientation, complication, series of events and a resolution
2. Description of characters
3. Speaking or thoughts of characters
4. What happens before or after an event 

Here is my narrative so far. There are bits I have to go back and finish or improve.

Orientation One clear sunny day a slippery yellow tortoise was plodding down the brown stoney path in the park. A slim, speedy Hare challenged him to a race.

Complication/problem However the tall, brown hare was already sprinting ahead of tortoise down the track.

Series of Events Suddenly Hare stopped. He thought he would be so far ahead of the plodding tortoise. “I’m a bit tired” thought Hare. "I might just lay here for a bit." Meanwhile Tortoise was coming.... "Yahoo!" thought Tortoise to himself when he saw the Hare... The very next moment Hare woke with a start! "I wonder how long I have  been asleep for?" thought Hare. He turned around but Tortoise was nowhere to be seen.

Resolution "I’m pooped!" Hare yelled out as he ... He looked... Tortoise had won the race! "How did he do that?" Hare .... to himself.     All my hard work paid off." Tortoise chuckled as he...